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When I was young I made a friend.
She was kind of quiet-
a loner, like me.
She wore a long cloak of stars and melodies
that would wrap around us both when she got close.


As we got older
we became closer-
until she was all I could see.


She gave me words of comfort,
whispered when no one was around.
And I would hold her close,
Keeping her curled up inside.


Even when she was mean,
I would forgive her.
If she made me cry,
I would hold her closer.


We are never apart for very long,
though the people around us would try
and rip us from each other’s grasp.
She would simply disappear
for hours or days or months.
And soon she would sneak in my bedroom
with her cloak of starlight and music
and hold me in a lovers’ embrace.
This just... sort of happened.
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Noxious-Purity Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very well written. I love how you personified your subject the entire way through.
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tigerbar Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
I hope you aren't depressed too often. Sounds like at least sometimes it goes away.
 I've written some thing about depression and insanity and I don't wish it on anyone. Hopefully you don't keep it up too long and go too crazy.

Nice poem. Take care.
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Kounterpoint Featured By Owner May 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
XDDD That title's fking epic! The whole thing's very relatable, too. Good job. :)
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Student Writer
Impressive use of personification, my friend. :)
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GhostGirl818 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Student Writer
Heh, thank you ^///^
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Student Writer
No problem!
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wretchedwilly Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This just about blew my mind. Electrode Explosion  I wish I could be more help, but ill just leave this voltorb and a WOW!
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GhostGirl818 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Student Writer
Heh heh, thank you ^//w//^

(I hate to point this out, but I'm pretty sure that's an electrode). But it's the thought that counts :3
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wretchedwilly Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I't may very well be. I hate that the Pokemon artists were like, "we'll take a pokeball and draw eyes on it,  and then we can flip it upside down too, that will make another pokemon for us!"
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NuminousNocturne Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The title is somewhat jarring, which is not a bad thing. In addition the poem itself is truly wonderful. You have managed to describe depression rather accurately. Bravo.
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